Here are a few suggestions for improvements in your copy.


This news was written well, and I enjoyed reading it. But a few minor issues can still be fixed, I feel.

Apparently, when the ‘Ready’ hero Salman Khan incited the ‘Ready’ heroine Asin to gobble up insects, which they had hit upon at the sets of ‘Ready’ in Thailand, the actress without the slightest hesitation, stepped forward and gulped it down.

Kindly match the pronouns with the nouns they refer to. In the sentence above, pronoun ‘it’ (gulped it down) refers to the noun insects, which is plural. So we need a plural pronoun: them. Gulped ‘them’ down.

You can improve a little on word choice too.

The ‘Ready’ female protagonist, without shilly-shallying caught hold of one of the insects, guzzled it…

Guzzled is an ill-fitting word here. She ate the insect or drank it? I mean if we can show that she drank the insect along with water, then guzzle may be used here. But that would still be pushing it.


Kindly check the headline above and inform the erring writer too. News headlines are mostly written in historical present tense. Here’s some more information for you and your writers: http://cosmoswriters.in/writing-news-headlines/

Here’s another news edited badly by you: http://www.scivista.com/content/car-lovers-assemble-81st-geneva-auto-show-7812466.html

Kindly see to it that in your writers’ news, the ideas are clear and make sense to the readers. In this sentence from Nancy Anderson’s news, it’s not clear if the car’s per galon mileage is good or bad.

Though the latest creation of Lamborghini covers 13 miles per gallon, it couldn’t make its place in the market like other supercar makers, due to the sky high gas prices.

In this sentence, I don’t know why we have used the word ‘specifies’.

For such people, Jon Oakley’s British company, Oakley Design, specifies in taking more power out of Ferrari 458 and adding it to Lamborghinis.

Then, in this para, there’s bad grammar and a few words could have been bettered.

The show is scheduled to end on Mar. 13 and till now, the chief attention (attraction could be better here) of the show have been (bad grammar) Volkswagen’s Bull, which was loved by hippies in the 1970s and Hyundai’s i40 D-class, which is more popular as an easily reached luxury station wagon.

The phrase ‘an easily reached’ needs tweaking; ‘an easily reachable’ is a slight improvement, but I would still reserve this phrase for physical places, rather than cars. I am more likely to use ‘approachable’, but I will end up with ‘affordable’, which is a way more fitting word here than the vague, unidiomatic phrase ‘an easily reached’.

Kindly take this news up with Nancy Anderson and discuss all these issues.